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theinkwell in The Ink Well • last year (edited)

hello @bipolar95 I can see that you put a lot of time into this story. It is lengthy but also a little unwieldy. It feels like you weren't sure which elements of the story to focus on and develop. This has left key aspects of your story undeveloped. By taking on too much for this prompt, your story grows arms and legs and becomes a little chaotic and confusing at times, and you don't have the space within the confines of a short story to explore everything that you introduce and do it justice. Try to focus your writing on key elements of your stories going forward and write more deeply and layered about a few things than more superficially about a lot of things. You also need to use a grammar checker to correct punctuation, especially around dialogue.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well.

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bipolar95 last year (edited)

Thank you for the observations would do better 🙂

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theinkwell last year

You are doing great! Just be mindful of sizing your story to fit the recommended word count. You have some amazing backstories and side plots here. They would just need a bigger canvas to explore and develop them all more fully. So, just make some adjustments depending on the word count construct within which you find yourself. You could quite easily rewrite this as a longer serial fiction, developing all the backstories and subplots individually and then pulling it all together again... same story, just far more detailed... and then post it directly to your blog or a community that allows serial fiction 🥰

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bipolar95 last year

Thank you for the suggestions and encouragement, would look into it 🙂

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