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RE: Chioma’s Wedding Party.

in The Ink Well2 months ago (edited)

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This is a nicely imagined story and an appropriate response to the prompt, @abojode. We enjoyed reading this.

We would like to call your attention to one sentence in the story that is a bit out of place (we do this to help you as you write stories in the future).

In Africa, the parents of the groom and bride sit together and also take pictures both bride and groom

This bit of cultural information is offered as straight exposition and does not fit into the story. A story should maintain the illusion of fiction throughout the piece.

However, the scene as you describe it is quite entertaining and works well otherwise.

We remind you, also to comment on two stories for each one you publish.

Thank you!