Brother's sudden return.

in The Ink Well16 days ago (edited)

"How did my surprise feel?" - The voice seemed to come from near the window.

Maria stood there in a state of surprise. She had some books in her hands, a bag around her neck, but she felt something when she heard the voice. Suddenly, she turned back and looked near the window, then Maria was surprised. Her chest felt like it was shaking a lot at that time.

"Hey brother, you're here" - Maria shouted. Maria's bag fell off in an instant, then she ran to her brother. She hugged him tightly.

She was so happy to see her older brother Monir in front of her that she would remember that day for the rest of her life. Five years ago , Maria had dropped her brother at the airport when her brother had gone abroad. Maria was studying in the ninth grade at that time. Today, five years later, her brother has returned. However, before that, their conversations were sometimes on video calls or audio calls. Maria couldn't believe her eyes.

"Do you recognize me or have you forgotten me?" - Monir.

"What's the matter with you coming suddenly? You didn't tell anyone so soon, and your parents didn't tell me anything." - Maria.

He has been through a lot of mental journeys, and his body seems to be emitting a faint scent. However, his beard has grown a lot. It's as if he is unrecognizable. His hair seems to have grown a lot longer now.

Then he put his hand on his sister's shoulder and said, "Surprise, I can't live without you for the rest of my life, so I thought I would give you some joy through a little surprise."

"You probably don't know how much I missed you these five years," Maria said, wiping away tears.

Monir said with a smile, "I missed you a lot too. What can I do, there is a lot of work pressure abroad. And in the midst of this work pressure, sometimes you are asked about your news. I have no other choice.

"So what's the use of you leaving without telling anyone. How could you suddenly make this plan?" - Maria.

Then Maria called Monir inside the house. Monir entered the house and then took off his shoes and sat on the sofa.

"I got a month's leave, sister. I thought I would spend this month with you. It's been many years since I saw any of your faces properly. I came suddenly to surprise you. Forgive me, sister." - Monir.

Maria went to the kitchen to make coffee. "Leave me a little less sugar because my body feels quite bad now. I have become very fat after eating foreign sugar." Monir.

Maria smiled and said, "I can't see any change in you. You are still the same as you were before."

Maria made coffee for her brother. Then the two of them took coffee and sat by the window. It rained, which is why the weather is now quite good after the rain.

While drinking coffee, Monir said, "This coffee has many qualities. But you still make the same coffee as before. You can definitely live well if you go to your husband's house, you understand.

"Then you stay here, you don't need to go abroad anymore. Then you can drink coffee from my hand."- Maria said with a smile.

"I don't like you going anymore. I have only one elder brother, what will happen if you leave?"- Maria said.

Monir smiled and said, "Then how can I surprise you, my naughty sister?"

Maria became a little serious then, "But I won't let you go again, I told you, brother."

Monir then put a hand on her shoulder and said, "Tell me what to do, sister, I have no other choice. I went abroad 5 years ago to fulfill my dreams. Now I have some more work to do, I have to do it. But from now on, I will come home when I have time."

"Mom and Dad are not here now. If they come, they will be very happy to see you."- Maria.

"I wanted to surprise my mother first, so that you could see me first. My mother always complained about me, and I would quickly hang up the phone. I know my mother gets very angry."- Monir.

Maria said, "Hey brother, tell me what you will do if my mother has a heart attack."

"I know my mother will be very happy to see me. You should be quiet and not say such rude things."- Monir.

Maria seemed to go back to the previous moments for a while. Maria still remembered leaving her brother at the boarding school. But she had run away like that suddenly without telling anyone at home. Everyone was almost surprised then.

"You don't know how empty this house feels to me without you. Except that only guests come to your room, I always keep it well-decorated."- Maria said with a lot of emotion.

"I thought you threw away all the things in my room." Monir.

"Oh no, I didn't do anything like that, but you still have those old posters with Messi's pictures."- Maria.

Then suddenly the doorbell rang. Maria ran to the door and saw that her mother had come. Monir realized that her mother had come and went a little closer to the door. Her mother had a bag on her shoulder. Maria opened the door.

After seeing her son, the mother seemed to stop a bit.
She was quite surprised and tears welled up in the corners of her eyes.

"Hey, who is this Monir, my son, a piece of my heart."- Monir's mother.

The mother hugged her son, "I came to surprise you."

"You didn't think it was necessary to tell me even once that you met me today after so many days. I am very happy. "- Monir's mother said with tearful eyes.

It seemed to Maria that today was a festive day, and the whole house burst into laughter in their house. She was very happy then.

"A lot has happened, I have done a lot of work. From now on, when I get a day off, I will come running to you, mother," Monir said.

This sudden arrival seemed to spread warmth all around. It seemed as if the flowers of life had bloomed anew among all of them. This might be the real joy in their lives.

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Wow, this is such a sweet story. I was really happy when Maria saw her brother again after so many years. It made me smile that she hugged him so tight and even cried because she missed him so much. It’s really special when families can be together again, and I think he made the right decision to spend his one month leave with his family.

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Happy ever after..

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I enjoyed your story, @nahid43. The reunion of Monir with his family is very sweet. I thought I would send along some resources from our catalog of storytelling tips that might be helpful to you.

Your story is mostly told in dialogue, which is an interesting storytelling style. You might want to consider integrating more narrative to provide a bit more information to the reader. For example, it was a nice touch in the story to describe the brother and sister sitting by the window with their coffee after the rain. And it would be really good to provide a little more information about why he left.

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Good luck, and keep writing!

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Losing your brother for five years and getting to see each other again must be a very great moment for Maria and Monir. I could feel the joy of the family reunion

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Being apart from family is never easy. But reunion could just seal up everything that was missing.

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I like the cordial relationship between Maria and her brother, Monia.

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