The friends defy the warnings from the forest and pay the consequences. A forest that controls people's actions? Dangerous indeed! Sounds intriguing as a reader but then this piece doesn't evolve. There is great dialogue but I wanted to see more development of this story and its characters. Instead, we are left not understanding how or what is happening to the friends. What gives the forest its supernatural quality? Why is it so angry? What is it hiding? None of the conflict is resolved. None of our questions are answered. And this is frustrating as a reader as it feels incomplete. You need to flesh it out, develop your plot, and resolve the conflict, so that you give your readers the full experience. And if you want to keep it a mystery and left to your reader's imagination as to what is happening, give us a few little morsels to guide us so that we can go... Oh... this makes sense... perhaps the forest is angry because XYZ.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well.