This is a very interesting and powerful piece! You've successfully blended a philosophical exploration of routine with a touch of humor and a call to action. Stanza 5 stands out for me with all the things we can do to change up our lives. I particularly like 'collect squirrels like Bobby'. Having said that I also feel this could have used more of the editorial pen. For example play around with the structure some more. I hope you take these words as encouragement - keep writing.
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